写得很不错，比我强，只指出几处小地方。
to
begin
with,
one’s
out
beauty
will
fade
as
time
goes
by,
but
one’s
inner
beauty
will
always
shine.
(the
beauty
will
fade
when
the
time
goes
by.
but
the
inner
beauty
of
someone
will
always
shine.)
elisabeth
kübler-ross
had
also
said
(elisabeth
kübler-ross
said)
her
friends
always
joke
about
her
small
eyes
that
she
should
open
them
sometimes.
(her
friends
always
joke
about
her
small
eyes
and
said
that
she
should
open
them
sometimes.)
people
opposite
opinions.
(people
with
opposite
opinions)
finally,
plastic
surgery
is
harmful
and
risky
to
one’s
health
and
even
life.
(finaly:not
a
proper
word
to
be
used.
talking
about
cosmetic
surgenry,
it
is
so
and
ao…)
life
is
a
valueless
treasure,
(life
is
valuaed
treasure/
life
is
priceless
treasure)
(all
in
all,
a
beautiful
face
is
merely
a
shell)
after
all,
beauty
is
only
skin
deep.
make
people
to
be
more
attractive.
（makes
people
more
attractive)
.a
beautiful
appearance
doesn’t
make
one
to
be
superior
also
due
to
our
various
sense
of
beauty.
(a
beautiful
looks
doesn’t
make
someone
superior
and
it
is
also
subject
to
different
judgement.
*better
expressed
in
2
sentences)
